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Sometimes great beauty can come out of tragedy. Such is the case with Corinne Bailey Rae's second studio album, her first since the March 2008 death of her husband, saxophonist Jason Rae, from an accidental overdose. Channeling her grief into these deep waters, heartbreaking set that's almost painfully exquisite. From plaintive strums of the soul-bearing opener "Are You Here" to the "goodbye paradise" refrain of the title-track farewell, there is an elegiac elegance underscored by the fragile ache in Bailey Rae's voice. All is not somber, though: She breaks into a '60's shimmy on tracks like the funky, psychedelic--tinged "The Blackest Lily." But the disc reaches its cathartic peak with back-to-back ballads: "Love's on Its Way" and, ever so aptly titled, "I Would Like to Call It Beauty."

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This article is chalk full of utterly unnecessary words. Who in the world knows what "elegiac elegance" means? I don't. I may be a little stuck on simple, but I think that you either say what you mean and mean what you say, or don't say anything at all. All these extra words like "cathartic" and "plaintive" are unnecessary I think, they're just fillers to make his/her article sound professional and longer. This article could only fairly be read by a musical producer who understands that type of language. These types of writings are pretty well useless to normal people like me.