Tuesday, March 16, 2010

Pride and Prejudice

Original Paragraph:
Not all that Mrs. Bennet, however, with the assistance of her five daughters, could ask on the subject was sufficient to draw from her husband any satisfactory description of Mr. Bingley. They attacked him in various ways; with barefaced questions, ingenious suppositions, and distant surmises; but he eluded the skill of them all; and they were at last obliged to accept the second-hand intelligence of their neighbor Lady Lucas. Her report was highly favourable. Sir William had been delighted with him. He was quite young, wonderfully handsome, extremely agreeable, and to crown the whole, he meant to be at the next assembly with a large party. Nothing could be more delightful! To be fond of dancing was a certain step towards falling in love; and very lively hopes of Mr. Bingley's heart were entertained.

Now I will re-write a couple sentences:

Adverbial Clause:
Since her report was highly favourable, Sir William had been delighted with him.

Adjectival Clause:
Nothing that he could think of could be more delightful!

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Now I will re-write this paragraph in more understandable language:

When Mr. Bennet got home, even with the help of her daughters, Mrs. Bennet could not for the life of her get the description of Mr. Bingley she wanted out of him. They questioned him down to the pulp, but eventually settled for their neighbor Lady Lucas' rendition. What she had to say was all very agreeable. Sir William was also greatly impressed with him. He was young, handsome, and had a great personality; to top it all off he was to be attending the next big party in those parts. Nothing could be more exciting! To like to dance increased the chance at love, and to be sure, there were to be many candidates for Mr. Bingley's heart that night.

1 comment:

Unknown said...

Hey Katie! Abi here, how are you liking Pride and Prejudice?
I LOVE Jane Austen!
Hope everything at the school is going fine. Miss you all!
~Abi