Week 28- Kids in the Kitchen

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Although he may not be able to cross the street alone, 4-year-old Jack Stuart is starting out on the right foot in the kitchen. The budding chef from Wauwatosa, Wisconsin became fascinated with cooking at age 2. When he recieved a play kitchen and could pretend to cook for his family, his interest increased.

Now I am going to do an evaluation of this paragraph:

This paragraph basically tells how an over-achieved little boy likes to cook.