Original Paragraph:
Good horsemanship is based on common sense and tact, and whenever you are around horses, you need to exercise both. Before attempting to mount your horse, you must get into the habit of checking all your tack to see that it is secure and safe, and that your girth is sufficiently tight. If you are taking riding lessons, and your horse has already been tacked up for you, you must still check that everything is secure; do not rely on someone else having done this for you.
Now I am going to do an evaluation of this paragraph:
This paragraph tells us alot about staying safe and secure. I think that this paragraph is aa very good lesson for someone who doesn't know alot about writing and needs some information. This is very good advice for when you are mounting a horse.
1 comment:
It would be interesting to see an imitation of this paragraph, maybe applying the principle of taking responsibility for your own safety to some other activity. Keep up the good work.
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