Original Paragraph:
Leontes, king of Sicily, and his queen, the beautiful and virtuous Hermione, once lived in the greatest harmony together. So happy was Leontes in the love of this excellent lady, that he had no wish ungratified, except that he sometimes desired to see again, and to present to his queen, his old companion and school-fellow, Polixenes, king of Bohemia. Leontes and Polixenes were brought up together from their infancy, but being by the death of their fathers called to reign over their respective kingdoms, they had not met for many years, though they frequently interchanged gifts, letters, and loving embassies.
Now I am going to do an evaluation of this paragraph:
This is alot better that the Midsummer Nights Dream one, I think. The sentences are better and it's easier to read. It's a little more interesting knowing that the two kings are friends and it makes you wonder if everything will get straightened out or not.
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