Twilight-Meeting the Guests

Original Paragraph:
As they approached, I could see how different they were from the Cullens. Their walk was catlike, a gait that seemed constantly on the edge of shifting into a crouch. They dressed in the ordinary gear of backpackers: jeans and casual button-down shirts in heavy, weatherproof fabrics. The clothes were frayed, though, with wear, and they were barefoot. Both men had cropped hair, but the woman's brilliant orange hair was filled with leaves and debris from the woods.

Now I am going to change one of these sentences to include and adjectival clause and I will comment on the writing.

Their walk, which was a catlike gait, seemed constantly on the edge of shifting into a crouch.

I think that this paragraph would be classified into the descriptive category. I like it because you really get a good picture of the other vampires. To me, the woman seems kind of scary with all the stuff in her hair. This part in the book is pretty intense, because the Cullens are afraid that they are dangerous, and that they might kill Bella, the human.

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