Little Britches

Original Paragraph:
I wanted to show her that I could fall off on purpose without getting hurt, and that I was brave enough to do it with Fanny galloping. I thought maybe I could do the somersault trick so I'd come right up on my feet. It didn't work any good at all. There must have been a big old jack rabbit that I didn't see, sitting right at the edge of the sandy patch. I had Fanny going like sixty and had loosened up my knees, all ready to take my dive, when she set her feet and stopped dead still. I went off over her head a mile a minute. If I'd gone a couple of feet farther, I could have grabbed the old rabbit as he raced away.

Now I will rewrite it with this week's vocabulary and some of my own wording:

I wanted to show her that I could fall off on purpose and remain unscathed, and that I was brave enough to do it with Fanny galloping. I thought maybe I could do the somersault trick so that I would land upright on my feet. My efforts were futile. There must have been a big, old jack rabbit that I hadn't seen sitting right at the edge of the sandy patch. I had Fanny going pretty fast and had loosened up my knees ready to make my dive, when inexplicably, she set her feet and stopped abruptly. I went flying over her head like a shooting star. If I had only gone a couple feet further, I could have reached out and grabbed that old rabbit before he raced away.