Original Paragraph:
Do not let the cat go near the bird; she will tear him with her claws and eat him up. The cat may go and catch the mice because they do us no harm and eat our food, but she must not get our poor bird because the bird sings to us and lets us know when it is time to rise.
Now I am going to re-do this story with better detail:
Do not let the ignoble cat go near the regent bird; she will tear him with her claws and chow him down. The cat may go and catch the filthy mice because they do us no harm and eat our food, but she must not get our poor golden bird because the bird sings to us and lets us know when it is time to rise.
(the words in red are my vocabulary words for this week.)
2 comments:
kmz
Well, maybe I should write something this time instead of leaving a blank. First vocab word is used well; second word needs some tighter to link to the text, some reason to use it. Perhaps you could have added detail to the section about waking us up, indicating how the bird rules our lives and so must be protected. Interesting passage choice; thanks for sharing it with me.
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