(this pic is of Shane being a ninja) LOL
Original Paragraph:
Peter Pindar was a great storyteller. This is known to all children who have read his books. One day as he was going by the school, the children came around him and they all wished him to tell them a new story.
Now I am going to re-write this with richer detail:
Peter Pindar was an awesome storyteller. This is known to all people under the age of 10 who have read his books. One day as he was going by the school, the childrem came around him and they all wished him to tell them a new story.
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