Wednesday, February 2, 2011

Gone With The Wind


Original Paragraph:
Scarlett O'Hara was not beautiful, but men seldom realized it when caught by her charm as the Tarleton twins were. In her face were too sharply blended the delicate features of her mother, a Coast aristocrat of French descent, and the heavy ones of her florid Irish father. But it was an arresting face, pointed of chin, square of jaw. Her eyes were pale green without touch of hazel, starred with bristly black lashes and slightly tilted at the ends. Above them, her thick black brows slanted upward, cutting a startling oblique line in her magnolia-white skin--that skin so prized by Southern women and so carefully guarded with bonnets, veils and mittens against hot Georgia suns.

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Destiny was the most pure type of beautiful; she could captivate any man, but he always had to have a second look first. Her face was very lightly tinted, with a crop of copper colored freckles dusting her cheeks. She had long lashes, and they were a light golden color. Her eyebrows were the same shade of gold, and naturally beautiful; for they had never met a pair of tweezers. Her long, curly hair was the color of the sunset in her old Kentucky home, a deep reddish brown. Her skin was as white and pure as a pearl, not in the least tan-able. Her beauty was pure and without a molecule of makeup. It just took the men a few minutes to realize it.



1 comment:

Magistra Z. said...

Beautiful! Very good use of the model paragraph and of your own imaginative language.