Original Paragraph:
I now really saw Ian's room for the first time, with the noon sun filtering down through the narrow cracks in the ceiling. It wasn't as bright as Jamie and Jared's room, or as tall. It was smaller, more proportionate. Roundish-sort of like my hole, only ten times the size. There were two twin mattresses on the floor, shoved against opposite walls to make a narrow/scarce aisle between them. Against the back wall, there was a long, low wooden cupboard; the left side had a pile of clothes on top, two books, and a stack of playing cards. The right side was completely empty, though there were shapes in the dust that indicated this was a recent occurrence.
Ian set me carefully/tediously down on the right mattress, arranging my legs and straightening the pillow under my head. Jared stood in the doorway, facing the passageway.
"That okay?" Ian asked me.
"Yes."
"You look tired."
"I shouldn't be-I've done nothing but sleep lately."
"Your body needs sleep to heal."
I nodded. I couldn't deny/dispute that it was hard to hold up my eyelids.
(the words in red are my additions)
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I like this paragraph because it explains the surroundings, but also shows how carefully Ian is with her. He cares so much about her yet she doesn't know. Later in the story, they fall in love. I really love this book even though it has some interesting and sometimes confusing ideas.
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