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He did not walk directly across the cavern, instead keeping close to the curve of the wall. I wondered at his path until I noticed a large swuare of darker ground that took up the center of the floor- a very large space. No on stood on this darker ground. i was too frightened to do more than notice the anomaly; I didn't even guess at a reason.
There were small movements as we circled the silent room. The bending woman straightened, twisting at the waist to watch us go. The gesturing man folded his arms across his chest. All eyes narrowed, and all faces tightened into expressions of rage. However, no one moved toward us,and no one spoke. Whatever Kyle and the others had told these people about their confrontation with Jeb, it seemed to have had the effect Jeb was hoping for.
As we passed through the grove of human statues, I recognized Sharon and Maggie eyeing us from the wide mouth of one opening. Their expressions were blank, their eyes cold. They did not look at me, only Jeb. He ignored them.
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Hmmm....so verbs and adverbs.... Of course like anything written, there are many verbs. One thing interesting was that there weren't too many adverbs though... Some of the colorful verbs that stood out to me were the ones like "faces tightened," "twisting at the waist," and so forth. This writer gives a clear picture of what is happening when Melanie/Wanderer and Jeb are walking through a crowd of ravaging humans to get to the bathroom in the caves. I chose this passage because it, in itself, is very strange and interesting to read, because nothing like this would ever happen in real life. The whole book, well the part I've read so far, is full of surprises, it is in no way predictable, not your average Cinderella story. This author is very interesting and I love her books.
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