Original paragraph:
Sir Daniel and his men lay in and about Kettley that night, warmly quartered and well patrolled. But the Knight of Tunstall was one who never rested from money-getting; and even now, when he was on the brink of an adventure which should make or mar him, he was up and hour after midnight to squeeze poor neighbors. He was one who trafficked greatly in disputed inheritances; it was his way to buy out the most unlikely claimant, and then, by the favor he curried with great lords about the king, procure unjust decisions in his favor; or, if that was too roundabout, to seize the disputed manor by force of arms and rely on his influence and Sir Oliver's cunning in law to hold what he had snatched. Kettley was one such place; it had come very lately into his clutches; he still met with opposition from the tenants; and it was to overawe discontent that he had led his troops that way.
Now I am going to re-write some of the sentences with new words in them.
But the Knight of Tunstall was one who never rested from filling his coffers; and even now, when he was on the verge of adventure..........
Kettley was one such place; it had come very lately into his acquaintance; he still met with opposition from the tenants; and it was to....................
1 comment:
Really good word choice! I think your words actually do improve the sentences.
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