A McKettrick Christmas

Original Paragraph:
The man across the aisle from her laid down his newspaper, stood and stretched. He'd boarded the train several hours earlier, in Phoenix, carrying what looked like a doctor's bag, it's leather sides cracked and scratched. His waistcoat was clean but threadbare, and he wore neither a hat nor a sidearm-the absence of both unusual in the still-wild Arizona Territory.

Now I am going to write this with some vocabulary and comments.

The stately man across the aisle from her laid down his newspaper, stood and stretched. He'd boarded the lofty train several hours earlier, in Phoenix, carrying what looked quite frankly like a doctor's bag, it's leather sided cracked and scratched. His waistcoat was clean but threadbare, and he wore neither a hat nor a sidearm-the absence of both unusual in the still-wild Arizona Territory.

I think this man sounds very mysterious in a way that he's clean but he's also poor. Also, later on on the page, it says that he was very good looking, so he's pretty interesting.

red words are vocabulary words